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This is an interesting document; I liked reading it, and like the approach.

There are some small nits that could be considered to improve readability (I don't consider any of these to be critical or to have technical implications, just editorial):
- OODA is explained in 2.1.8, but then the acronym is also defined in 3.2, and again defined and further explained in 5.2.  It seems a bit repetitive, and these separate mentions are not referencing one another.
- OAM acronym is defined in 2.1.7, then again in 3.2, and again in 5.2.  Again, it's a bit repetitive.
- Different logical planes are mentioned starting in earlier sections, but it didn't seem to me like they were well explained until Section 4.1 and finally in 4.3 the concepts started to "click".  I didn't fully grasp the importance or value in distinguishing all these different planes (controller, network, operational, and data planes with some seeming like standard networking concepts, some coming specifically from DetNet, and others extended by RAW), but also didn't think it did any harm.  It just doesn't seem like these are laid out well early enough.

Some other very small editorial nits:
- Section 2, "quantic" should probably be "quantum"?
- Section 2.1.6 - the LQI definition is a little confusing; LQI is a metric on specific links, but carried in messages and collected over paths, so it's not quite clear to an unfamiliar reader how this is supposed to be understood to be working (e.g. conveyed separately somehow for each link, or integrated somehow across all links in the path, etc.)